I'm writing a story...

that's fucking awesome really!!

well you said you wanted constructive criticism, right? a writer must always describe each scene with detail... but you missed a specific detail!!! you should at least refer to Mark's size in some way!!

and i see you've given me a new nickname! JL! that's nice, it's like a rapper's nick, but you could also just call me John or Johnny! nevermind though,whatever you like, JL seems cool!
 
thanks :D
you're right :O well i said something might still happen with me and him...maybe THEN i'll mention how big it is! what would you think...big, average, little?
i couldn't think of anything but JL XD if you like, i'll change it
 
I like JL :)

I'm gunna start callilng Katie 'Kables'. Her initials are KB and if any of you have seen The Pick of Destiny (the Tenacious D movie) you'll know that Jack Black (initials JB) gets called Jables.


So yeah. Anyway...I don't know if I should say this on the bands official forum...but I think Mark would be HUNG.



xx Kirsty
 
yeah, what is hung?????? small or big??

Oh allright!

it's ok, you can say that on the official forum since it's good for him!
 
So I formulated the start of my plan by saying, “Guys, this place is a little stuffy, not to mention that someone needs to come by and clean more than once in a few years! Why don’t we book a hotel room, one of those huge ones?” There was a few moments of silence before Apollo said, “Sure, sure. That actually doesn’t sound too bad. Anyone else feel like it?” Both of us stood up and looked around. “Aye,” Mark agreed as he joined us.
I wanted to say something right now like “no!! I hope he doesn’t know the REAL reason why I suggested we all get a hotel room!” but instead I kept quiet and just smiled.

So it was decided. The guys packed their stuff and we started going aboard the tourbus. The moment I set foot in the bus, the smell just about overpowered me. It was a combined stench of dirty, sweaty clothes worn many times without washes in-between, various bathroom smells, and Ouzo. I stepped back on the steps suddenly, and almost bumped Bob off and onto the street. We stood there a moment. Being short as I am, I was quite little compared to Bob. I felt something poke my back, near my shoulders. I didn’t dare look back to see exactly what it had been, but I had a pretty good idea…

(hm can anyone guess what the last little bit means? :p ;) )
 
probably! you could also draw some pictures and make this story like a comic you know!! it would be very nice! and you could make money by selling it! (porn always sells a lot, let alone with firewind starring!!)
 
ROFL. Men cast their tents at the most inappropriate times! Was he wearing his leather trousers? ^_^

yes, yes he was wearing them!! :oops:

probably! you could also draw some pictures and make this story like a comic you know!! it would be very nice! and you could make money by selling it! (porn always sells a lot, let alone with firewind starring!!)

and you all have seen my artistic skills so i'm gonna put this into drawing!:lol:
anyone remember the video "the making of allegiance" ?