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...is going pretty well.But I started it out w/this girl,the main character,is in her room getting ready to go this heavy metal club where her band,Superbitch,is playing.The first 2 and a half pages go over what she's wearing-black jeans,combat boots,Slayer shirt,lots of metal jewelry,black lip stick,etc.I want this story to have a lot of detail.Anyway,I left off where she is leaving to catch a ride to the club w/her friend who is the singer of the band.And I think the way it's going,this story is going to be more about this girl that the band full of Satan worshippers.This isn't going to be some work of teen fiction crap-Nocturn Abyss is still in here!But I'm also incuding a lot of stuff about the main character,like her issues w/her friend who she really can't stand,her other metal head friends and this guy frind of hers-the main character's name will be Lauren,I think.I'm using my bitch of a friend Amanda*as inspiration for Superbitch's singer,who would rather be a pop singer than the singer of a metal band and constantly gives Lauren shit about the way she looks.Lauren's metalhead friends have a band of their own and want Lauren to join them bcuz they know how much she hates the band she's in now.And the guy friend of hers really wants to be "more than friends with her"(that is the fucking stupidest way to put it,I'm sorry).After all of those things come into the story,Superbitch is about to start their performance,but the singer refuses to be onstage w/Lauren and she leaves the club angrily.So Nocturn Abyss goes instead of the Superbitch,Lauren watches their show and is totally in awe by this band-not only do they have the power of Satan,but they are really HEAVY.After they're finished,she goes backstage and meets the band.She talks to the singer and tells him that they really kick ass and their performance helped her work off her anger at her band's singer,etc.This guy tells her that he can make it so that all of her problems disappear with the power of THE DARKNESS(Satan),he will take care of her problems and give her all of her desires-fame in a metal band-if she just accepts him and becomes a follower.So she says that she really wants what he says he can give her and he performs this initiation ritual of singing her wrists with fire then exstinguishing the fire w/her blood and she gives up her soul that way.Then she gets her life going her way and she has lots of power and there's another soul for Satan everyone gets what they want it's a happy ending the end.
Oh gog,I just realized how horrible that sounds... this story is terrible :wha:Somehow,I'd imagined the end sounding MUCH,MUCH better...can anyone hepl me with this?Suggestions,please!!!!
Oh gog,I just realized how horrible that sounds... this story is terrible :wha:Somehow,I'd imagined the end sounding MUCH,MUCH better...can anyone hepl me with this?Suggestions,please!!!!