What do you think of my trance productions?

[Ericlingus]

Hey I know this isnt what a lot of you guys are probably in to but I value your opinions. What do you think of my trance tracks I made? First time i've ever made an electronica song. I usually do metal and have been trying to fuse together metal with electronica. I've been working on my electronica production skills so I decided to make some pure electronica songs. What do you think? They are pretty raw mixes. Are they a good start? What do you think of the songs themselves?

Here is the first one I did

http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/file.php?id=29621

And the second


http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/file.php?id=29622

 

[Ericlingus]

anyone?

 

[Ericlingus]

is the second track too bass heavy? My friend says it has this annoying sound too it like someone who cranks the bass in their car stereo system where it rattles.