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... here is a sample of my poetry. Please don't flame me, as this counts as off-topic, and well.. RiderofJustice asked me to do this, so I'm being polite and endulging him, not whoring my work, which by the way I feel isn't all that great to begin with, so sorry for subjecting you to this:erk: :

A Lot of Animosity by Joe Gagnon

I'm not much of a man;
and as a lot of land my value would be little at best.
I'd be far off from the caring cities;
a petty, worthless piece of property
owned by ever-present contempt and ferocity.
I'd be fenced off by a hideous, decrepid wooden symbol
of harder times long since past.
Not even the blackest of birds
would dare to stand and call
into my desolate meadow of amarathine malevolence.

All around there'd be forests which encourage
their mindless inhabitants to lead artificially crucial lives;
in an effort to draw more from the receding vines
of interdependance which only empower the wealthy
with larger roots tapped in sin.
The statuesque trees standing seemingly graceful
with nature teeming within believe themselves to be
so superior until winter comes endless, killing spring
to reveal nature's truth.
That false habitat of conformity is home to everything
I was tricked to crave and born to despise.

And for all the green I'd be yellow.
Unkempt deviant grass, dry and rigid;
ready to snap from the lightest touch of cruelty
or become an endless inferno from the tiniest spark of ignorance.
My ground would be disgusting, littered with lies and violence
covered by the thickest layer of inpenetrable clay packed with regret
as to hide the lost memories and shame buried deep beneath.
You can scratch away some of the filthy topsoil
but it would be too impure to view anything.

To walk upon me, you'd know I was not level,
the earth varying with each step.
Inside me, discover the sight of dead branches on sickly plants
combined with a revolting silence intermittantly disturbed
by the crushing and breaking of my heart's dying foilage.
For years I was untouched, left in decay and rot,
yet flies strayed from me still.
The sun laughed in the sky as it passed over me,
casting down rays of hope that only scorched and robbed my earth
of what little precious moisture was stored.
But through luck you were lost
and found your innocence treading on my terra firma demonica.
You fell in love with harsh scenery
and with one kiss bought the land forever.



More of my work can be found here, if you're interested:
http://www.eliteskills.com/u/heartlessname
 
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you look like HellHammer on that pic :lol:
 
RiderOfJustice said:
lol i stopped caring once you started talking about your property... very enlightening..................erm....*cough* NOT *cough*
:blush: K, yer sposed to read the whole thing before you just, silly. :)

MegustaMucho said:
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you look like HellHammer on that pic :lol:
LMAO, I do not :lol: :lol: :lol: I look like a dude who just tore the leg off a maniquin at some random store and then had to stand still and get his photo taken. :Smug: :p
 
poetry is an art... quite a challenge to come up with something deep and meaningful too...
 
Söy said:
poetry is an art... quite a challenge to come up with something deep and meaningful too...
Thank you, as I said I'm not a good poet either :erk: but he asked to see it. Also, if anyone has any comments, good or bad, they'd be greatly appreciated. Just as long as, you know, you actually read the poem. :p
 
i didnt read the poem i just wanted to comment for people giving you shit for even trying. i used to write it in my spare time way back when so i know how difficult it can be, and i didnt think it was fair for people to be typing bad things about your poetry when they probably don't try themselves. and kudos to you for daring to post it on the internet even.
 
i didnt read the poem i just wanted to comment for people giving you shit for even trying. i used to write it in my spare time way back when so i know how difficult it can be, and i didnt think it was fair for people to be typing bad things about your poetry when they probably don't try themselves. and kudos to you for daring to post it on the internet even.
Well, thank you, very much. :) And well, even though I write poems, I'm a mean motherfucker, with courage and balls. So I don't care if it gets blasted, it's the only way to improve, right?. Though I'd appreciate it if you read the poem and gave me yer opinion of it, if you want. You're intelligent and anything you have to say would be appreciated.

AlexiLiimatainen said:
pomes r 4 fagz, lol.
^poems maik gurlz w3t :lol:
 
Heartless_Name said:
A Lot of Animosity by Joe Gagnon

I'm not much of a man;
and as a lot of land my value would be little at best.
I'd be far off from the caring cities;
a petty, worthless piece of property
owned by ever-present contempt and ferocity.
I'd be fenced off by a hideous, decrepid wooden symbol
of harder times long since past.
Not even the blackest of birds
would dare to stand and call
into my desolate meadow of amarathine malevolence.

I agree
 
Heartless_Name said:
^:erk: :confused:
...I bet you're proud of yourself. :Smug: How sad...

Like you are when you write a 5 page long "funny" argument and end with "j/k" ?
 
Writing poetry is one of the most difficoult thing on earth. I'm not familiar with the kind of free verse that you use, I'd like to know where you have found your inspiration for this piece of work. The first paragraph in my opinion is more powerful than the others, you can almost taste the feeling of despair and it's obvious that there is a research beyond the words written down.
Oh and I like the emotion achieved with these few lines:
For years I was untouched, left in decay and rot,
yet flies strayed from me still.
The sun laughed in the sky as it passed over me,
casting down rays of hope that only scorched and robbed my earth
of what little precious moisture was stored.​
 
Draznog said:
poetry is for depressed people and emo kids.
lol, not really. Maybe a certain kind of poetry.

Igraine said:
Writing poetry is one of the most difficoult thing on earth. I'm not familiar with the kind of free verse that you use, I'd like to know where you have found your inspiration for this piece of work. The first paragraph in my opinion is more powerful than the others, you can almost taste the feeling of despair and it's obvious that there is a research beyond the words written down.
Oh and I like the emotion achieved with these few lines:
For years I was untouched, left in decay and rot,
yet flies strayed from me still.
The sun laughed in the sky as it passed over me,
casting down rays of hope that only scorched and robbed my earth
of what little precious moisture was stored.​

Um, why thank you. It's more over a larger metaphor, and the 'lot' is a personification of a man who questions himself and feels nothing good has come from his life, and generally feels like a bitter, worthless person. It's not really free verse, it's actually called 'prose'. Prose is poetry, but less mysterious and more wordy, to explain it briefly.

But thanks for the comments! Glad you enjoyed! :)