Good job. I think this song would be better if the chorus vocals were left completely out on the the 2nd occasion, thus making 2:34 - 4:14 completely instrumental before returning to the chorus with vocals on the 3rd occasion as in 1st, except the 3rd should be spoken to cool down the supposed ballad and support that 'trancic' feel of the intro. The chorus guitar composion is sort of interesting but it's absolutely buried under the horrendous singing section. So 1st chorus screaming, 2nd mute, 3rd spoken.