A little hello from the slow reader. I have a really stupid time at the moment and can't concentrate much on reading. And since this is so difficult to read, I need my whole head on the topic.
But I just passed the part with the blind poet and while I agree, it has nothing to do with the story and it made sense to leave it out in the song... I enjoyed reading that part a lot. The description was very vivid and intense, I tried to imagine her situation back on earth, she really struck a chord within me.
All in all I'm so impressed about the vast amount of ideas, backstory, characters that are cramped into this poem. Most span a verse ore a couple of verses, nothing more. But they peak my interest enough that most of them leave me with yearning to know more about these people, the situation, their fate, how they feel, well - everything.