I think the problem with it is that all the lines carry the same weight, so the eye doesn't pick out the name from the ornamentation around it. Try thickening up some of the key lines in the name itself and it might be more legible.
i can do it for you tonight possibly but i wont be able to send it to you till after thanksgiving break... in my opinion id go with Sanctum Chaotica it sounds fuckin badass
Can anyone help me come up with a name that is for a Rap/Metal band that also sounds kind of Experimental and unique? I was thinking of Reanimation but thats a little bit generic.