I got about halfway through it and it sounds great. It gave me a couple of laughs, too.
Btw Rammstein's Mein Herz brennt is written wrong. You put a t in Her(t)z.
@hyena: You're productive, that I can tell. I've already had a go at the first part of Racaille! this morning and now another 6 pages...I enjoy the storyline but the characters are still unknown to me. I feel the construction of their personalities is a bit slow but well integrated, mostly in dialogue. (I just found out that dialogue is apparently not in the corrector of the forum)
@hyena: is there any rahvin in it?
then make another short story, for our pleasure only, around him. that ought to be fun.no, not so far, and i don't think he'll be coming in.
then make another short story, for our pleasure only, around him. that ought to be fun.
Well, if you have inspiration and want to do it after the R! thing, you're welcome to. It wouldn't be much good if you started it now and then the R! protagonist killed you because you didn't finish hers.
At your disposal anytime. I've been told several times that i should be writing soap-operas.Yet another interesting plot for an amusing and grim story. This place is a haven of inspiration!
yay! i shall go read!