if you're trying to argue that his lyrics are bad because they aren't cryptic lyrics like from whoracle then you're wrong.
No. You don't need to be cryptic to write good lyrics.
I cannot frame, that's why I lose control
I aim, I stumble and I fall
Our adaptation can't be faithful
Your world does not attract me
This is the end you see
There is no more truth in me
As if you would deserve it
You are my enemy
I can't tolerate your sadness
Cause it's me you're drowning
I won't allow any happiness
'Cause every time you laugh, I feel so guilty
I once read a poem, held my breath but that moment is gone.
Could that song have been worded better for the lyrics? Sure, but it's like, what else is it? What do you do with that type of topic besides write emoteful lyrics?
Because you think that they're emoteful. I think that they are generic and effortless.
like if he wrote something extremely abstract, it would defeat the purpose of talking to his son. If he wrote something that wasn't emotional, it would defeat the purpose of talking to his son.
Rushing through thirty
Getting older every day... by two
Drawing pictures of innocent times
Can you add color... inside these lines?
[Chorus x2:]
I want you to lead me
Take me somewhere
Don't want to live
In a dream... one more day
As far as the composition, I don't get how it's bad other than maybe needing some other stuff mixed in and a bit more variation in the notes, but the opening riff is alright, and the verse is a nice lullaby type riff which is the point.
If you don't know how generic irrelevant and boring composition, how joining random pieces of music is bad there's nothing that I can do.