Your vocals sound a bit... Not immature, but... un-matured (if that makes any sense). Which probably isn't your fault, but you might want to try and do them lower and more in the growl-register and less in the throat (which isn't good for you anyway).
I liked everything else quite a bit, though. Especially that keyboard interlude and guitar solo.
I liked everything else quite a bit, though. Especially that keyboard interlude and guitar solo.


