I actually did a couple takes that were better but I had to put the camera on some blankets and turn the stereo down so I was able to be heard better, and I was a little wore out by then It varies from day to day usually for me lately
Well the music isn't really doing anything for me, but the vocals have a good sound. As you already knew the timing has some issues though. I get why you posted for opinions but I'd much rather hear it mixed in at least a little, it sounds so out of place